Teresa!Your poems really do seem to take a shift toward the interior as your portfolio progresses. I enjoyed the characters in the earlier poems and the voice in the later poems. I have to say "How Am I Supposed to Know" is a great poem to end on. I think it showcases a great mix of the interior and exterior worlds that you are able to bring into your poems. It's got some familiar poetic voices as well as some fresh language. Nice work! I've enjoyed reading your poems this semester. Thanks for sharing!
I'm glad you call so much attention to voice in your write-up...I can definitely see the moment when you kind of find yourself. Your first couple of poems, I can, without a doubt, see emotions behind the words on the page...but the imagery is so abstract that they don't fully crystallize. But from "An Adolescent Summer Scene" onward your footing is rock-solid.
So many things about your style of writing suddenly spring into life, from then on...your breathless, alliterative music, the atypical, indirect word choices of your rhetoric, the tone created by your unique voice--most visible in the way you use repetition in "Summer Scene" and "Ode to Ramen." You're very clever, and thoughtful when you mention things like still loving "Dad's cooking," or the small victory of making it to class on a rainy day, or being afraid, but ready to meet the future as you meet a dog on Landis. I think this is your greatest strength, the way you approach these little quiet moments.
I'm glad you were able to find your voice and reconnect with poetry, and through it, your past. I don't know what you've gone through, specifically, but I know how hard life can be sometimes. I find it very appropriate, and reassuring, how much poetry--and healing--has entered into your life.
Omg the yellow summer poem!! I could not stop thinking about it and I was so excited to find out who wrote it. Reading that poem, I felt like I was the speaker and I could feel and hear and taste everything written. I got such a vivid picture of a normal summer day when I was little but a yellow-tinted glittery cartoon version. It is definitely one of my favorite poems from this semester. I think all of your poems are good, but it is cool to see how you improved and found your voice throughout the semester. I'm from South Florida too and I love all the references to the sunshine there and the shitty "winters" in Tallahassee, my first year here I seriously considered transferring to a school back home lol. You are really good at focusing on multiple things within one poem. I kinda guessed you were Rainbow Poptart, just because you do such a great job of bringing your personality to your poems. I could keep going on and on. Your poems are great, you are great, pls keep writing!
Ps. your comment on my post really made my day, thank you!!
Teresa, knowing now who your pseudonym was I enjoyed reading through all of your poems and I could really notice the progression. I too hadn't written any poetry in several years and was a little scared about sharing my writing with the group. I think you have developed a very unique writing style. I appreciate the vulnerability in your poems. As I have also found, poetry is a great way to work through things. I loved your last poem. I think it is a perfect way to commemorate our time at FSU, even thought the semester was cut short. I hope you continue to write poetry!!
Teresa! Your poems really do seem to take a shift toward the interior as your portfolio progresses. I enjoyed the characters in the earlier poems and the voice in the later poems. I have to say "How Am I Supposed to Know" is a great poem to end on. I think it showcases a great mix of the interior and exterior worlds that you are able to bring into your poems. It's got some familiar poetic voices as well as some fresh language. Nice work! I've enjoyed reading your poems this semester. Thanks for sharing!
Howdy, Teresa. I hope you're doing alright.
I'm glad you call so much attention to voice in your write-up...I can definitely see the moment when you kind of find yourself. Your first couple of poems, I can, without a doubt, see emotions behind the words on the page...but the imagery is so abstract that they don't fully crystallize. But from "An Adolescent Summer Scene" onward your footing is rock-solid.
So many things about your style of writing suddenly spring into life, from then on...your breathless, alliterative music, the atypical, indirect word choices of your rhetoric, the tone created by your unique voice--most visible in the way you use repetition in "Summer Scene" and "Ode to Ramen." You're very clever, and thoughtful when you mention things like still loving "Dad's cooking," or the small victory of making it to class on a rainy day, or being afraid, but ready to meet the future as you meet a dog on Landis. I think this is your greatest strength, the way you approach these little quiet moments.
I'm glad you were able to find your voice and reconnect with poetry, and through it, your past. I don't know what you've gone through, specifically, but I know how hard life can be sometimes. I find it very appropriate, and reassuring, how much poetry--and healing--has entered into your life.
Best wishes.
Omg the yellow summer poem!! I could not stop thinking about it and I was so excited to find out who wrote it. Reading that poem, I felt like I was the speaker and I could feel and hear and taste everything written. I got such a vivid picture of a normal summer day when I was little but a yellow-tinted glittery cartoon version. It is definitely one of my favorite poems from this semester. I think all of your poems are good, but it is cool to see how you improved and found your voice throughout the semester. I'm from South Florida too and I love all the references to the sunshine there and the shitty "winters" in Tallahassee, my first year here I seriously considered transferring to a school back home lol. You are really good at focusing on multiple things within one poem. I kinda guessed you were Rainbow Poptart, just because you do such a great job of bringing your personality to your poems. I could keep going on and on. Your poems are great, you are great, pls keep writing!
Ps. your comment on my post really made my day, thank you!!
Teresa, knowing now who your pseudonym was I enjoyed reading through all of your poems and I could really notice the progression. I too hadn't written any poetry in several years and was a little scared about sharing my writing with the group. I think you have developed a very unique writing style. I appreciate the vulnerability in your poems. As I have also found, poetry is a great way to work through things. I loved your last poem. I think it is a perfect way to commemorate our time at FSU, even thought the semester was cut short. I hope you continue to write poetry!!