So the feedback that I am searching for is how I can make the story more clearer. I also wanted to see if the words I'm using are too simple or if I should aim to choose different words.
Honestly, any feedback is encouraged I really don't know my strengths or weaknesses.
Nothing is nothing
Everything is everything
That’s what you say
When you do the things, you regret
later on
Or you say those awful things you shouldn’t have said
Why is it that we have no remorse?
When the damage is already done
But
When time passes and you start looking back
You expect forgiveness
and
You say it’s for them
But it’s really for you
I hope you’re doing fine now
But my hopes never come true
So, lets toast to your voice
That justifies your mistakes
Because
nothing is nothing and
everything is everything
to you
https://soundcloud.com/diosili-dee-salazar/new-recording-6
Hello Dee,
Honestly, I think that the amount of story you provided works very well! It reveals just enough to the reader that they can get a pretty good understanding of what is going on in your poem, without being incredibly obvious. There is someone that has wronged the speaker, perhaps incredibly harshly, and the speaker is trying to make sense of this person's actions. I think that structurally the poem is very well done, and I'm a sucker for callbacks so the ending was great!
I also felt this poem. The emotions conveyed were very clear and tangible and I thought you did a wonderful job. I also thought it was interesting how the emotions seemed to progress through the speaker, starting with denial and disbelief, anger, then finally ending up in acceptance or what appears to be acceptance.
Also, there's nothing wrong with the words you chose! Dr. Suess made a whole franchise using made up words so don't be apprehensive about using simpler language.