What's up gang its ya boy garrett coming at you with another poem. I'm not crazy about this one personally but I'd love to hear what you think. I feel like imagery is usually a strong suit of mine but this one is really lacking in it imo, and I'd like to add more but I'm not sure where. Tell me what you think this needs? What I should get rid of? Any and every opinion is welcome. Miss you guys. Audio here: https://soundcloud.com/james-figueroa-815451262/how-to-have-fun-again
Hi James, first thing I noticed is the beauty in its duality. It feels journey of realization but from two different perspectives and even though different states of mind - there seems to be something to be appreciated in both. One is blind dumb fun and one is conscious fun. I think it's very well balanced and ends beautifully. I wouldn't change much to be honest.