Hi James, first thing I noticed is the beauty in its duality. It feels journey of realization but from two different perspectives and even though different states of mind - there seems to be something to be appreciated in both. One is blind dumb fun and one is conscious fun. I think it's very well balanced and ends beautifully. I wouldn't change much to be honest.

Hi you're great and this poem is great. You have such an original/distinct voice that makes your poems so easy to identify. I love the wit. I love the imagery. I love that this is relatable yet still so specific to you. I love the ending, I think it ties the whole poem together and leaves it on a positive note. I just wish the poem was longer so I could keep reading!!! 10/10

Hi James! I really love this poem, great work teammate! Whether you meant to or not, I sensed a lot of indirection in the first half of the poem. You employ kind of a words that don't necessarily conjure up imagery (as you pointed out) but do conjure up a lot of physical feelings. I feel like this lines up pretty well with a night of heavy drinking, you may not remember everything, but you sure do feel it. So I feel like the lack of imagery in this poem actually works well in that way. That being said, I think you can build even more on that—those words that invoke feeling. I'd love to read a second version of this poem that is even more tangible. Great job! Love it!

I knew you were Garrett! On another note, thank you for sharing with us your poem James. I really liked this poem. I enjoy the sarcasm and the humor within it and it makes our "hopeless" current events not so bad (kinda is but still). I feel like your poem placed us in a beautiful setting at first and then at the end we are in a place where we don't actually want to be. This poem really makes me appreciate the little moments that I didn't absorb as much but nonetheless I think you did well writing this and I'm glad your style stayed the same as when you were Garrett.