Listen to the poem here: https://soundcloud.com/user-806649468/life-in-palmtree

On an island in an electron sea

I learned to garden:

pansies, hyacinth, tulips, cosmos,

with a watering can hammered together

from a tree I felled

and a knot of iron.

I shook the leaves for branches and coconuts.

The bark scraped my palms.

I’ve worn more dresses here

than outside.

Flew in and dyed my hair blonde.

Blushed my cheeks peach-pink

and labored what name to sign my passport.

I taught myself to sew from my head.

Knit blouses and skirts from alpaca wool

sprayed by sea-foam.

It spilled past my ankles.

I never wore shoes.

I’ll tell you this: wish here

and stars will wash up

the next morning.

The most important piece of advice I've received in this class, as far as it comes to actually sitting down and writing a poem, is this: give words their appropriate weight. That is to say, put something that deserves to be at the end of a line at the end of a line. My question is this: what about the opposite? In this poem I notice I put a lot of more inconsequential words at the beginnings of lines. "The." "And." "I." Etc. Does this work? Is this an appropriate place to put such words? Am I overusing them? Is there anywhere in this poem that will be better if I cut down?