Moving onto better things
By Kallie Overstreet:
https://soundcloud.com/kallie-lynn-overstreet/moving-onto-better-things
I never noticed
The beauty of nature
Looking up at that blue sky
Laying down on that freshly cut grass.
Hearing the murmurs of people walking
Up and down the sidewalks
Did you hear what happened to
What a beautiful day it is.
How do people run so much?
I’m out of breath watching them
Panting.
Sweating.
Dying basically
Maybe I should move onto working out
Or maybe I should move closer to the fridge
Cookies or strawberries.
These are hard decisions
Do I move onto being healthier...
Or do I move closer to
Who knows?
Hello Kallie,
I love love LOVE the story of your poem. I think it is really beautiful how you addressed something that a lot of individuals deal with. I love how it seems like this is not a new thought for the narrator as well and I would love to see the thoughts being pushed further. I think it could be accomplished by adding more questions or repetition to show how high the stakes are for this person. Overall, you did an amazing job. Thank you!!!