For me, I'd like to see a little more indirection as this poem deals with a previous love pretty directly. Like if the person has an aura--what strange object could describe it? What was the melody like? What kind of a monsoon? or what figure/animal/type of person is in the middle of the monsoon?
For me, I'd like to see a little more indirection as this poem deals with a previous love pretty directly. Like if the person has an aura--what strange object could describe it? What was the melody like? What kind of a monsoon? or what figure/animal/type of person is in the middle of the monsoon?