The feedback that i would like for my poem is the gate you entered into it from, what aspects of it stand out the most, what works in the poem and what doesn't really work. I personally thought it kind of sounded like something from a children's book but that may just be the rhymes? I'd love to hear thoughts on that though. Also I'd like to hear any general comments or suggestions. Thanks so much and I hope everyone is staying safe!

I LIKE TO LAY OUTSIDE AT NIGHT

By Ella Schoening

I like to lay outside at night

Staring off into the stars.

The shining lights call out to me

To explore the space afar.

I wonder what it’s like up there,

Do the planets feel alone?

Does the darkness feel as scary

As it does down here at home?

I’ve never cared much for the dark,

For the things it hid in shadows.

But there are no monsters in the stars

Only gods and kings and heroes.

I want to run with the little bear

And ride a winged horse,

To fly with the fiery dragon

And sail by Jason’s course.

So I fix my eyes up to the sky

And slowly drift asleep.

For I have no gifts or special talents

But these tales are mine to keep.