Hey Cailin! Sorry about the late feedback. I think this is a super unique poem and I love the way you so easily adapt the voice of an animal, which is a difficult task (for obvious reasons). The first line is so striking, because it catches the reader completely off guard and throws stereotype out the window. I'm not sure what feedback you want specifically and this is a very small critique, but in the second to last line when you say "knocked" I think it should be in present tense. I also agree with Mat that some of your lines could be shorter. Great job!!
Hey Cailin! Sorry about the late feedback. I think this is a super unique poem and I love the way you so easily adapt the voice of an animal, which is a difficult task (for obvious reasons). The first line is so striking, because it catches the reader completely off guard and throws stereotype out the window. I'm not sure what feedback you want specifically and this is a very small critique, but in the second to last line when you say "knocked" I think it should be in present tense. I also agree with Mat that some of your lines could be shorter. Great job!!