Hi everyone! Here's the audio link for my poem: https://soundcloud.com/user-791829904/a-florida-story
I tried to focus on story and detail within this poem more than anything. I felt like the third stanza needed more in general, of what though I'm not exactly sure. I just felt blocked writing the third stanza and I think it could've had a stronger ending. anyways, i'm open to any and all constructive criticism!
Arielle!
I just read this poem in your portfolio, and I'm really blown away by the imagery in it! If you are looking for advise on your final stanza, you might want to try an almost complete look away. Maybe the final stanza is a scene completely outside of Florida ending on an image that is also not Florida. But somewhere in that stanza you could hint at a Florida detail you've already written about. In any case, I think it's one of your best poems. Nice work!