Hello everyone, here is the link to my spoken word poem if you would like to listen to it: https://soundcloud.com/user-711670661/the-rotten-pit ... I have always attached an image of my poem below, let me know what you think!
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Bijan!
I'm loving this peach metaphor. Your word choice and music are really making it come to life. I wonder if the title "gives away" the ending a little bit too much. I love the idea of the pit being something we discard, but there's also the element of not even liking peaches at all. There's so much going on behind the scenes here, I love it. I think the use of the months is really unique, too. I wonder if you could even squeeze all 12 in there without it being obnoxious. Thanks for sharing this piece!